Developing Paragraphs

After critically analyzing one of my body paragraphs with the understanding of what a good body paragraph is; I feel that my paragraphs meet the standard to which a good body paragraph should meet. I believe that all my paragraphs are clear and concise and connect to the main idea. My introduction gives my audience background to my life and to what my essay is about.

Arrangement

For my essay I choose to start off with background information on my topic for my introduction paragraph for this particular essay. I choose this method because I am writting directly to my teacher who has insight to what I'm going to write on being that she has already read my thesis statement. For my conclusion paragraph I have decided to repeat my thesis statement because when I write an essay I usually write my introduction and my conclusion first. I believe that my choices will appeal to my audience because it will bring some insight to why I went through the struggles I went through.

Thirty-Eight Who Saw Murder Didn't Call the Police

In a situation like the one in Thirty-Eight Who Saw Murder Didn't Call the Police I would have dedfinetely called the police. I would have called because I would want help and it's the only just thing to do. I don't think I would have gone outside because I wouldn't have been able to put my life in danger. Some factors that would have kept me from going outside would have been wether or not the atacker had a weapon or not and in this case he did.

Free-writting

The free-writing assignment was very useful. Before the writting asssignment I hadnt planed on being as detailed as Iplan on being now. Talking with my peer and free writting on my own has helped me expand my thoughts and now I know I have a better more clear and concise thesis statement.I've taken a step back and re-read my thesis and it is extremely generally, I belive that my thesis should be more specific and be able to be applied to my entire essay.